Monday, August 3, 2009

Wet Mud
















Rolling down the park,
Boy looked upwards;
Drop caressed skin,
Round, his eyes went;
Mother cried,
"Come back fast";
Smell better than a dough nut,
Stupified his senses;
Knelt to the ground,
Nose pressed into mud;
Sheepish grin, blushing,
Smell was ticklish;
Lips kissed the mud,
Now, he enjoys rain.

12 comments:

  1. this one is very good dude..!!!

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  2. This one the best of all dude....

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  3. puri!!!!!yaar how do u mix ur emotions wid words so well.emotions jst blend in ur ink

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  5. Too cute!....your brain is store house!...you need to do some more charity.

    The way you has created the scene of rain in last stanza and its diligent relevance to the lines above with a sweet short and crisp termination...OMG itz OSM!


    Suggestions:Make it pretty interesting here by describing your poems in at least five lines to general readers...either before starting the poem or at the end...and put some appealing question for them to work with.
    All I am asking about is -output and productivity.

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  7. dude ur deep thoughts n emotions jst forces one 2 enroll in it!!

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  8. oh man...this is exactly how I feel when it rains...I never knew it could ever be expressed in words so accurate and yet so simple!!

    luv this poem....

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  9. love it yar...
    it's got a really nice imagery and gr8 flow....
    beautiful
    no other word to describe it!!!!

    pls mujhe bhi kuch tips dede yaar!!!!!

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  10. awesome.....didn't know u could write that well....
    keep..writing...

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  11. hey just can't Believe that u r just a kid...bro u r simply awesome very matured thoughts. god bless u.

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